Hmmm. This chapter was the devil to write, because different characters knew different things: for some of them, this is the first time they've heard a lot of what's happened (Sin's attacks on the temples, Vegnagun).
Also, to some extent, I'm recapping because I've introduced so many plot threads, it seemed like a good idea to lay them all on the table, at least once.
But on the other hand, you're right: lots of exposition, leaving little time for decision-making.
I'm hand-waving some of the decision making, because I imagine it actually took hours and hours of debate and argument after Lucil's proclamation (especially with Baralai and Shelinda). So I used the dramatic device of a vote. A bit contrived and hand-wavy.
The chapter I'm writing now is giving me fits because I didn't entirely "chew" the debate and objections that might've been raised in this chapter.
Thanks as usual for nitpicks. Heh. I added in that sentence about weeping blood in the last pass -- I've had Isaaru dabbing at his eyes, but was afraid it was too subtle. Maybe I'll revert to the earlier version.
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Date: 2009-11-01 10:02 pm (UTC)Also, to some extent, I'm recapping because I've introduced so many plot threads, it seemed like a good idea to lay them all on the table, at least once.
But on the other hand, you're right: lots of exposition, leaving little time for decision-making.
I'm hand-waving some of the decision making, because I imagine it actually took hours and hours of debate and argument after Lucil's proclamation (especially with Baralai and Shelinda). So I used the dramatic device of a vote. A bit contrived and hand-wavy.
The chapter I'm writing now is giving me fits because I didn't entirely "chew" the debate and objections that might've been raised in this chapter.
Thanks as usual for nitpicks. Heh. I added in that sentence about weeping blood in the last pass -- I've had Isaaru dabbing at his eyes, but was afraid it was too subtle. Maybe I'll revert to the earlier version.