I really liked this actually. It somehow seems you have pinned down Shelinda's voice, although I might not be able to articulate how that is. I like the sense to this that it's a sort of desperate address to Yuna. At one point I thought it might be a letter, but I think I like it better as Shelinda's frustrated thoughts in the midst of the chaos of Bevelle.

I love the way she can still be wistful about the wedding even though she has seen Seyour's cruelty firsthand and marvelled at it. I like the way she forgets Seymour's honorific. That would mean a lot to someone like Shelinda and the fact that she has neglected to use it betrays both her ambivalence towards him and her confusion at events.

I love the desperate way she wishes Lady Yuna and herself good luck at the end. It sounds like Shelinda unravelling and I like that thought, given that Yevon is unravelling and it must have her all in a tizzy.