ext_259393 ([identity profile] cumuluscastle.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] auronlu 2008-07-18 03:37 am (UTC)

Auron's cynical response to the young person offering his mother's supplies is typical. I like the way Isaaru's response is so graceful on the contrary. Clearly he has learned the Summoner's skill of diplomacy.

I really enjoy the detail about Auron's memory slipping. I also like the idea of potions going bad.

I like Auron's observations about Lulu being forgotten. I like that he seems resentful of the fact she wasn't credited with the death of the Chocobo Eater.

I love how Elma 'authorizes' Pacce to laugh. I like the way you've aged her, still blunt, but much less apologetic for her bluntness.

I like the "Matters of Conscience." You've written it very well as a cumbersome rule that a bulky religious organization would implement. At the same time, it is also quite a happy attempt at fixing some of the problems that existed.

The garden is interesting and sets up intriguing possibilities.

Shouldn't this Garden have a lower case 'g?': Look for me in my Garden, Auron.

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