auronlu: (lucil)
Title: "Inspection"
Fandom: Babylon 5
Drabble for: [livejournal.com profile] owlmoose
Words: 100


The airlock door opened. Boot heels pounded the deck. "Captain Susan Ivanova, Earth Force, reporting for—"

"'God sent you'?"

"—shipyard tour of the EAS Titans." Dropping the crisp salute, she thrust out a hand towards the unsmiling officer. "Commander Berensen. Pleased to meet you."

He stared at her, then shook hands.

"General Leftcourt did not mention where you'd earned that Purple Star. I'm impressed. Not many came out of that battle." Her voice roughened. "On either side."

He exhaled. "We both need a fresh start, Captain."

"Agreed." Her ramrod posture relaxed. "The ship?"

"Ready for your inspection, Captain. This way."





Note: Cmdr. William Berensen is from "Hidden Agendas" short story by JMS. So he's canon. I donno anything about him except this, which suggests that Ivanova comes to trust him fairly quickly.
auronlu: (Yuna's Final Aeon)
I have done a major edit-sweep of LHAD, to help me get all the canon back in my head before I embark on the big battle sequence.

Most edits were cosmetic. However, in response to reader-questions during the Shuyin-confrontation, I've revamped the Via Purifico chapter to make Lenne's cameo somewhat more clear (while still leaving an intentional ambiguity) as well as, "what happened to Maroda?" Hopefully that part of the story is now easier to follow, without losing the subtlety that [livejournal.com profile] cumuluscastle likes in some of my writing.

I'm still waffling over the use of Otherworld lyrics during the Shuyin fight. It was an experiment. I'm curious how many readers liked vs. were distracted by it.

I renamed the "Unraveling" chapter (viewing Yuna's sphere) to "Love Her and Despair". So many other plot-threads have developed that the meaning of the story's original title has been obscured. In that chapter, when Auron faces love and despair while viewing Yuna's sphere, the deepest kernel of the story pops out.

I love reader feedback -- it's amazing how much y'all have helped me refine and solve plot issues, even though the basic story and chapter outline have remained almost unchanged since chapter 14! [livejournal.com profile] mandyiam gets the prize for killing off a character I hadn't planned on killing: addition by subtraction. [livejournal.com profile] owlmoose, [profile] muggy_mountain and [livejournal.com profile] trekqueen are the Backstory Consultants. [livejournal.com profile] cumuluscastle is critic extraordinaire and post-production beta reader, since I'm too danged stubborn to have one.

I am still struggling to reconcile two sets of reader tastes: those who like subtlety versus those who want things spelled out more explicitly; and the readers who prefer 1200-1400 word chapters versus those who prefer 2000-4000. I keep waffling!

So, anyway. With apologies for the self-plug, let me wave the "Readers! Come and get it!" flag for a few of you who were clever enough to hold off until I'd polished the last few chapters.

Far Too Much Meta-babble about LHAD )

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