Date: 2009-07-03 03:37 pm (UTC)
You are so good at describing the logistics of things. I really enjoyed the description of the removal of the fayth from the temple. I like the way even Auron isn't certain enough to do it right the first time.

It also amuses me the way Auron is consistently too impatient to deal with things through 'official' channels. I like his flippant comments to Pacce after he stretched to truth to get the monks evacuated from the temple.

Tiny corrections:
-"You three, finish up with the doorway and start clearing away statue. Do not touch the fayth directly. The rest of you keep working on that wagon. Pacce, run tell the rigging team we're ready for them."
-I think it should be "the statue" and probably "Pacce, run and tell the rigging team."
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