Date: 2009-10-24 09:42 pm (UTC)
I'm almost too distracted by the fact that you *drew art of Paine and Nooj* to even notice that there's a story here... :D But I'll try. Nicely done; you handled them really well -- their past, why Nooj stayed away, the revelation of the scar. I am pleased!

The Auron and Isaaru scene is excellent as well. I enjoy the details of their coup, the revelation of how Anima is slowly destroying Isaaru from the inside (and the name you chose for her).

Finally, this is not too long at all. Neither of those scenes would have made a chapter on their own, and they complement each other nicely. I approve of keeping them together.
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