Date: 2008-07-13 06:35 pm (UTC)
I love that Dona is blunt about the fact that a Pilgrimage is not all sunshine and rainbows. If there is anyone in Spira who would be regretful about him "getting his chance," it would be her.

The battle of wits between Maroda and Auron is so interesting. I also really like the conversation between Lulu and Auron.

Again, I think Maroda's suspicion of Auron is very realistic and well-handled. He does seem a bit like he's in collusion with Sin to an outside observer.

Typo:
Had Auron already said to much? No, this warrior lacked the witch's knack for doubling half-truths.

It should be "too" much (a mistake I make often when I'm in a good writing groove myself) and is it "doubling" half-truths you mean? I am a bit confused about what that means, but it could just be me.

Auron is right not to underestimate Isaaru. He's a bit of a dark-horse. I always thought so.
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